This is what I wrote on an online dating site as a first hello email to a girl. tell me what you reckon?
This may sound quite aggressive or forward but you have the sweetest profile and I'd love to start up a conversation some time. There! I said it : )
And congratulations for the new job. I've always been interested in mental health (which is partly why I'm writing this). Will you be serving on an acute or chronic ward? I volunteered in november on an acute ward...so eye opening.
Anyways, date isn't exactly the easiest way to say but I thought I'd give it a go :)
I just hope when girls say they want a guy to be open, direct and simply say "hi", they were speaking for everyone.
Don't be a stranger,
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i would loose the agressive or foward part. it doesn't go with the rest of your message. and the part were you said "I just hope when girls say they want a guy to be open, direct and simply say "hi", they were speaking for everyone" it makes you sound like you are just going by what every other girl thinks, and if I was getting that message it would look to me like you have tried really hard to learn about the dating experience, which makes it sound like you might of had dating problems.
also, the x after your name would make me feel like your trying too hard and overdoing flirt.0