Ladies, should I give this to my crush?

I'm 17, she's 18. She got a full ride to a college out of state, and I want her to know how I've felt for a while before she leaves possibly forever. Should I give her this poem? Or do you think it'd be too.. cheesy?

I’ve never been the smartest,
And I’ve never been the bravest.
I’ve never been the fittest,
And I’ve never been courageous.

I’ve known you all my life,
And I never knew my greatest,
Feelings for a great friend,
Who makes me feel elated.

I’m not saying I’m the best,
I’m not saying I’m on the a-list.
But what I’m saying is that
----, you’re the greatest.


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What Girls Said 7

  • Wow it's really sweet it displays blatantly you're into her

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  • I really like it :)

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  • Give it to her! It's so sweet.

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  • Yes, give it to her :)

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  • It's cute and thoughtful why not. :)

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  • If she likes cute romantic things, go for it!

    I'm a romantic so I would love that kind of thing, but I have less romantic friends who aren't into that stuff.

    It all depends on what she likes. But I think the thought is very sweet

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  • You are completely oriented towards her
    It seems like she's the Center of your life and you are a loser
    Ugh

    Please don't give it to her and ruin your life.

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What Guys Said 3

  • I like it. it's sweet, heartfelt, to the point and not overly mushy. I think she'd appreciate it.

    now for the grammarian and writing major in me (hope you don't mind)...

    + the first stanza is the best. the flow is great it's self-actualized

    - in the final line change 'You're the greatest' to "you are the greatest". it flows better with your meter and contractions often seem strange
    in poetry
    - you could also move 'that' in the 2nd to last line to the final line. just repeat both to yourself to determine which sounds best
    -lastly. if you can find a synonym for greatest you may want to maybe you could use it in place of greatest in 2nd stanza 2nd line or the last line simply because you already used greatest once

    very good work though. I can't imagine she wouldn't like it

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  • That just depends on her personality.

    The two possible reactions are:
    1) Awww, that is so sweet! (Positive reaction)
    2) That is so cheesy I need to go on a diet (negative reaction)

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  • Yeah man send it. She'll be flattered

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