... Have you Ever?

Have you ever wanted to tie someone down..

Cut them with a razor blade and just watch them bleed?

Watch the blood bubble to the surface in the first fantastic rush and burst of colour...

Then watch as gravity pulls on the blood...

And it searches for the path of least resistance on its journey down..

The little red rivers separating and rejoining..

Matting hair as they go..

Pooling in the bodies hollows before pouring on in its descent..

All the while, their eyes are wild with fear and pain..

Darting this way and that, searching for help, escape, release, hope...

And finding none.

Tears welling to the surface..

Pain, anguish and hopelessness over running them until the tears start to flow down on their own journey..

Searching out their own paths..

And where they intersect the blood..

Diluting it...

Until finally..

You have a mixed puddle of blood and tears on the floor at your feet..

And you don't feel what you thought you would...

Just the familiar emptiness?

...Have you Ever??


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  • What. The. Fuck...

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  • 0_0 holy shit... Houston we got a... BIG... problem 0_0

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  • Yes but I'm still alive!

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  • well. . . shit, you should probably get some help

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  • Thank you for reminding me to lock my doors at night.

    By the way, YOU NEED TO SEE A PSYCHOLOGIST ASAP.

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  • A very descriptive prose, describing in such a distanced and clinical take on life seeping away with that twist at the end that makes you really think, "... familiar emptiness? This person has done this before..."

    The topic itself is disturbing and I don't condone it, but there are poetic and creative skills at play there.

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    • Thank you.

    • No problem... now I need to think about sulphuric acid to clean my mind of any images that might incriminate me..

  • no. but I've thought of shooting people and having dinner while they bleed out. only if they deserve it. but hurting myself? no not really I've wanted to yes but emotionally - no. hurting others like that no i dislike gruesome stuff. who would want to get dirty not me

    i dont like sick things unnatural things, depravity etc sickness

    i like natural, strength, and health

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  • Never have I ever

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  • Nice lateral thinking I like the way you use the metaphor...

    And some Dumbo's don't understand it!

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  • You sound like a keeper. How are you still somewhat single?

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  • Reminds me of me.

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  • Yes I have considered this about myself and others. Yet I'm afraid my fatal flaw is I'm too kind. ☹ Stupid conscience. Not bad, maybe we could compare notes sometime. 😉

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    • I know, right? Damn morals and ethics (no sarcasm... alright, maybe a tiny bit)

  • No, blood stains. Can't have anyone staining things.

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  • Very well written and poetic. But still very unsettling. Could be a very controversial poem.

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    • If you look through the other comments, I'd say you're spot on with that assessment.

  • I have thought about doing this to child molesters, child killers, and all those who are clearly guilty and show no remorse and get off on a technicality.

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  • Wow this is well written... very descriptive and vividly detailed!

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  • Good but very dark lol.

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    • thank you

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    • Do you ever feel like you are just the tool? a slave to the words?

      Often, I have an emotion, I sit at the keyboard, and it just comes, unbidden.

    • I am a instrument to the art a vessel in which the words flow though, when I write my hand simply moves and the words come to me as if they want to get on the parchment.

      The mark of a true poet is one who has suffered for his craft
      -Phoenix-

  • Flames. I prefer to burn things.

    But no... The emptiness will always remain no matter how much to try to fill it with pain, it will never make you feel better.

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  • Did you just read my inner psyche?

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  • For sure... I for sure do... laugh them in the face while doing so.

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  • That was metal at fuck. Encore!

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  • I feel emptiness but, not the emptiness to do that.

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  • You need to be in a mental instititution

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  • I can't relate this to this but it was very detailed and well written.
    So many feels !

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  • No and I pray that no one else does...

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  • If you had gone anonymous, I maybe would have thought you were a troll.

    But this is obviously good poetry.

    Great imagery :)

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  • ... What? Umm, okay...

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  • No I haven't. I am very relieved we don't live by each other...
    maybe lay off the violent media for a while.

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  • As someone wh is in the media industry, I love your writing, it is complete with visual images, that take you to where your protagonist or antagonist are. The fact that most of it is on a dark side is ok. Edgar Allan Poe was dark, and over a hundred years later we still read his works. Keep up your writing, it is a skill that not many people your age have.

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  • Beautiful but dark, are you okay? I hope whatever you are going through end soon.

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  • you need JESUS.

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    • Hahahahahah

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    • jesus was a carpenter not a gardener. poor ponybabies shit her pants when she read it i guess... . oh the emptiness of betwyn, who can fill it? can you really judge her for being like this? do you know what she's been through?

    • Johnvan it was supposed to be funny... you weren't supposed to think that hard about it lol. but no I did not shit my pants it's just crazy but well what she wrote.. you're 32 I would expect myself to explain this to someone near my age lol

  • That was the most demented "poem" I have ever read.

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  • I feel like this now... but I cut so meh I'm gonna go cut now this makes me feel like cutting...

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  • Do you by chance have a revenge issue?

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    • Not overly, no. No more then the next, average person.

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    • Well, thank you :)

      It is interesting how many people don't understand art..

    • I write fanfics to let my emotions out. What you have written is what I refer to as devious writing. That's a compliment. :)

  • Unacceptable and WTF of course I haven't. You must be in huge trouble!!

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  • Ummmm... hmmmm... not others no... to myself? Yes. I've thought about hurting my self severly. but Other NO WAY! You need a phsycologist or therapist... i dont care which just one of them... I will lock my doors from here on out...

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  • Your getting real dark of late?
    I have felt down not quite that far though.

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    • I actually wrote this one about 2 years ago.

      I've posted it here as part of an answer before.

    • I hadn't come across it before.
      So everything is going good for you or as good as it gets?

    • Oh, it is freshly posted here, yes.

      It is going ok

  • Oh lord, this was nice. And like hell I do!
    Are you okay? :(

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  • No? Jesus H Christ man

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