Was this a good poem?

Tears cannot stop the pain inside,
If he only knew how much I cried,
His smile, his eyes, his voice,
I fell in love I had no choice
The way he kissed me,
The laughs we shared,
The talks we had seemed like he cared.
Friends told me "there's something wrong"
I shouldve listened,
Now all that's left of me is staying strong
I love him yes I do
But never again will I be the fool
A love I finally had so deep,
Cuts like a knife,
Now all I do is weep.
No more I love yous
He was everything I wanted
But I said my last goodbye.

~cynthia moreno
I haven't written a poem since i was a little girl. My now ex boyfriend did me so wrong. So i wrote this. I blocked his number yesterday and blocked him on fb.


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Most Helpful Guy

  • im not a fan of poems but this was Great!

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Most Helpful Girl

  • :O I am shocked, that just reminded me of all my break ups :( but now that i havea loving Fiance it is pretty awesome that you wrote this due to pain, I am a poet myself with at least 99 poems to my name :) (sorry about the bragging rights, i go over board when i see good poems) I love it, maybe you and i can come up with a poem together through PM

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What Guys Said 2

  • No that's pretty bad

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  • LARS Porsena of Clusium
    By the Nine Gods he swore
    That the great house of Tarquin
    Should suffer wrong no more.
    By the Nine Gods he swore it,
    And named a trysting day,
    And bade his messengers ride forth,
    East and west and south and north,
    To summon his array.
    ...

    Just then a scout came flying,
    All wild with haste and fear:
    ‘To arms! to arms! Sir Consul:
    Lars Porsena is here.’
    On the lows hills to westward
    The Consul fixed his eye,
    And saw the swarthy storm of dust
    Rise fast along the sky.

    ...

    But the Consul’s brow was sad,
    And the Consul’s speech was low,
    And darkly looked he at the wall,
    And darkly at the foe.
    ‘Their van will be upon us
    Before the bridge goes down;
    And if they once may win the bridge,
    What hope to save the town?’

    Then out spake brave Horatius,
    The Captain of the gate:
    ‘To every man upon this earth
    Death cometh soon or late.
    And how can man die better
    Than facing fearful odds,
    For the ashes of his fathers,
    And the temples of his Gods,

    ‘And for the tender mother
    Who dandled him to rest,
    And for the wife who nurses
    His baby at her breast,
    And for the holy maidens
    Who feed the eternal flame,
    To save them from false Sextus
    That wrought the deed of shame?

    ‘Hew down the bridge, Sir Consul,
    With all the speed ye may;
    I, with two more to help me,
    Will hold the foe in play.
    In yon strait path a thousand
    May well be stopped by three.
    Now who will stand on either hand,
    And keep the bridge with me?’

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What Girls Said 6

  • "Goodbyes don't always mean forever..."
    -Paris Nichols

    With all of your heartaches and heartfelt feelings that Say so much in this beautifully written poem, @sunsetgoddess9, with the Motto that I have written and that goes hand in hand with This, This is what I Mean:
    Just because two people Breakup doesn't mean they can't and Don't Makeup and that it is Goodbye, my love forever. Many times with an EX who still Marks an X in his own softie spot here, dear, he will have motive in mind, sometime down the love line that's a fine line, to Contact you when he is Missing the Kissing.
    However, many times as well, the blast from the past with a relationship that did you wrong, he may never change, whether you go back as two birds of a feather or just be Friends with benefits, which many toms today find More or Less... Soothing to Not be hooked at the hip at the moment in the Love nest.
    That would be your your choice your call, but if you have decided, as strong as it seems you are with "I blocked," then keep him as well Locked... In the closet as this Ghost of yesterday that can no longer hurt you or rattle you in any way.
    Good luck and hoping you feel better in time. xx

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  • I think at the end maybe like 'But those were my final clues'
    Or something like that maybe (sorry lol I used to be awesome at poems and writing but I lost my spark)
    Your poem was literally SO GOOD though!! I almost cried tbh, and the way you made it rhyme and poems that rhyme are usually pretty practical, but you still managed to add some depth to it.
    I'm sorry you had that experience :( You'll get over it! There's many fish in the sea :)

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  • I LOVE it. I am definitely a big fan of poems 😊

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  • Aww thats just so emotional and i really liked it. I'm even gona save it <3 ak-hdl.buzzfed.com/.../...z-13096-1411572140-4.gif</a>

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  • its a nice one

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  • Apart from the 'yous' it was nicely done!

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