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I need feedback on the song I wrote for my girlfriend

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I wrote this song for my girlfriend, because one night when I was waiting for her to call me when she got off work, she was all that I could think about, so I started writing this, so if you could give me some feedback, that would be great!

I would walk through frozen tundra

I would climb the highest mountains

I would walk through brim and fire

Just to hold you in my arms

I will shout your name to the ends of the Earth

I will proclaim your name to the heavens

I will search for your beauty forever

I will love you always and forever

Your beauty radiating like the sun

Your hair as soft as a puppies fur

You are my world

You are my sun

Without you I am none

I would walk to the ends of the earth

just to be with you

You are my everything

You are my anything

I love you

Please stay

when I'm gone

Stick around for the ride

Love me to the end

It's coming fast

Soon enough I'll be back

in your arms

4 years past

Back for good

Stay,

Wait,

I will come back

to your arms

I love you

The ride has just begun

It is time for the adventure to start
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