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It's got some potential but a lot of it doesn't make sense. She wants a family to love her but she kills her "adopted" mother. She is a manipulative bitch but she wants to be loved. I can't root for the main character, there seems to be no reason to care about this girls story. She had a rough childhood, as we all did. Maybe if she kills her father (her first kill) for sexually assaulting her then gets sent to her aunt. But who pays the aunt? Why did it not work out.
I'd love to help you work on this as I am also a writer. There is potential, but it needs a lot of work to be done.
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