Is 'pupil' not a good word to use in a poem?

Hi guys.
I recently wrote a poem. When I showed it to my friend, he told me to drop words like "pupil" (hole in your iris through which light enters)
He said, words like pupil, iris, cornea and retina are better off in biology textbooks than in poems and literature.
I get the point of not using technical scientific words in a romantic poem and at first I did feel odd using it when he pointed it out.
But now I'm going to have to change the entire structure of that stanza. Moreover I had used pupil within an alliteration. So I don't wanna give it up for that too. The more I think about it the more I feel that it is not that big a deal.

What do you guys think? Would you find the use of word "pupil" (the pupil of the eye) odd and unfit?
Help me out. Please.
  • No. It doesn't sound odd. Keep it.
    Vote A
  • Biology in poetry isn't a good idea. Drop it !!
    Vote B
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  • You can use it

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  • drop it...

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