Tell me what you think about my new song, “Tableau” ?

Treading through the war,
Blood on our feet
It all leads back to what
We used to be

But it all gets colder
Fed up getting older
I’m hoping it’ll hold ya
I’m hoping it’ll last
Down where we are
In a blank War

(ohh)
Frozen in our deepest, darkest
-I can see the dead rise
Frozen in our deepest, darkest
-I see fear in your eyes
Kinda hoping that it shows
Kinda hoping that it don’t
When Suicide was at the door
I called for Tableau

Being frozen in the dark
Just revealed who we really are

Treading through the war,
Guilt on our faces
We took us to the places
Of our own darkness

We said that we could heaven
Searching for our brethren
Wanting to be pleasant
But God knows we failed
Now we’re in hell
Because we only found ourselves

(ohh)
Frozen in our deepest, darkest
-I can see the dead rise
Frozen in our deepest, darkest
-I see fear in your eyes
Kinda hoping that it shows
Kinda hoping that it don’t
When Suicide was at the door
I called for Tableau

Being frozen in the dark
Just revealed who we really are

*Wherever the ice grows,
The tip of the timed shows
Grip where the light is stowed*

Hold on with a face
That fades and dies
With new found faith


~~~~This is an incomplete piece, so don’t judge too harshly but I’d like to know your thoughts on the lyrics. Don’t go yapping about what rhymes and what doesn’t, and don’t be concerned about the melody. Critiques on the content only~~~~~~

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  • I like this, I cannot imagine a song as I lack talent but lyrics sound like I could get some feels from this.

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