Guys Do You Think This Poem I wrote For The Guy I Am Interested In Is Too Much?

So I wrote this poem about this guy, I have known him since October 2014, he's long distance, we would chat everynight sometimes for upto 5 hours, Skype, text, and speak on the phone, overtime feelings developed on both sides... I wrote this poem for him about the first night when I met him again in January 2015, hadn't seen him since October 2014, I wanted to know, guys, if a girl wrote this for you, what would you think?

I REMEMBER THE NIGHT WHEN I MET YOU NEAR THE BEACH
HEART SKIPPED A BEAT WHEN I SAW YOU
WHEN YOU EMBRACED ME IT FELT SO RIGHT
WE WE'RE BOTH SHY
DIDN'T KNOW WHAT TO SAY
WHEN YOU LOOKED AT ME FOR A SECOND AND OUR EYES MET
IN THAT MOMENT I FELT LIKE YOU WAS GOING TO KISS ME
BUT YOU DIDN'T
I FELT MYSELF BLUSH SO LEANED MY HEAD AGAINST YOU
AND YOU HAD YOUR ARM AROUND ME
I FELT LOST IN THAT MOMENT
WHEN YOU WALKED ME BACK
AND WE SHARED OUR FIRST KISS
IT FELT SO MAGICAL
AND IN THAT MOMENT I WAS LOST


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Most Helpful Girl

  • I remember the night when we met near the beach.
    Our hearts skipping beats as our eyes finally meet.
    When you embraced me, it felt so right,
    even though we were both so very shy.
    I didn't know what to say, when you looked at me that way.
    In that very moment, I felt like you were going to kiss me, but to no avail.
    I felt myself blush, I leaned my head against you.
    You had your arms wrapped around me, lost in the moment.
    When you walked me back, we shared our first kiss.
    It felt so magical, lost in the midst.

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What Guys Said 2

  • hope u won't send it n caps... otherwise he'd find it weird o_O

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    • LOOOOOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLLLL

      you took the words right out of my mouth lmfao

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    • @xnicholemariex3 oops... sorry dat i was faster then :D

    • It's okayyyy I answered in a different way anyway! :)

  • ITS AWESOME but that's not a poem lol but it's awesome

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    • Just my feelings from my heart :-) Glad you liked it

What Girls Said 3

  • If I were a guy, or even now as a girl, I would definitely never want to get a poem or song written about me. It's just creepy to me, I know some people are into that but I would feel like they were obsessed with me and about to kill me

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  • I love it but the only thing that's just a small grammar pet peeve is that you said "I felt like you was going to kiss me" but that could've just been you typing fast or something but other than that it's great!

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    • Sorry Yes I did right it fast, have to correct that lol, wrote it ages ago in wordpad, but had wrote it down really fast, just came into my head lol, when I was thinking about him!

  • It's pretty nice.

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