I wrote this story about a 13 year old boy called Peter, a smartly dressed, mature schoolboy in love with a pretty girl called Rachel. There's a scene in it where he's in the school toilets with his two friends. His friends are peeing. Peter's sitting on the toilet and his friends are teasing him about it. They say they will tell Rachel that Peter's having a poo on the loo. Should the scene be removed?
Most Helpful Girl
no. it sounds pretty realistic lol.1
Most Helpful Guy
Too be honest unless its important to the plot there isn't really a reason to put a scene like that in, and I've never heard of someone getting teased for going to the toilet haha.
But hey, its your story. If you think it fits then leave it in.2