How s that poem?

Control

Silence, obedience, punishment
makes you deprived of all movement
Paralysed, and indifferent
You can't react or you ll be delinquant
Discipline is a trend
Expression is a rant
Condemnation is the end
Order, control, personal fulfillment
A stage play of power entitlement
A display of human excrement

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    Everlasting pain
    Sadness fills my empty heart
    Love me, let me free

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    • 2mo

      Don't know why I wrote that, the first 3 lines made me think of abusive relationships

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    • 2mo

      Wow thanks for mho :)

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      wlc :)

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  • I am not a big fan of English poetry will the modern one , are poems supposed to rythme? But that was good not bad

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    • 2mo

      if it is modern it depends
      you can do as you please. you can even make it prose like I suppose.
      Honestly English isn't my first language too.
      no critic?

    • 2mo

      Nope got no critic 😛

    • 2mo

      ok thanks :)

  • I really like it - Well written - Very emotive

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  • Don't like the last line, doesn't flow

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    • 2mo

      dude that is the best part!

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