OK so I like poetry so I write my own poem's but I had a little trouble finishing this one what do you think? And I don't like the ending much I'm thinking of changing it
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this is a nice message, but if i may, i can help u edit it. the key with sad poems is to slow your reader down and let em feel ur pain for a moment. that means more lines.
Everyday I see you
I become incredibly doleful,
knowing that the love I have for you
isn't returned to me, but instead
held for another.
just a few grammar fix ups and sentence structure and you'll b fine =] keep expressing urself.1