Can you fix these grammar pls?

The Leo River is currently facing a problem of deforestation because of the illegal logging of a furniture manufacturing company. After they realizes their wrong doing they wanted to help by planting back 1500 trees


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Most Helpful Guy

  • First sentence: Remove the passive voice by changing "is currently facing" to "faces". Also, cut down on wordiness by removing "a problem of". Remove "the" between "of" and "illegal". Also, change "furniture manufacturing company" to "furniture manufacturer".

    Second sentence: Change "realizes" to "realized". Also, change "wrong doing" to one word as "wrongdoing" and insert a comma after it. Also, remove "back". Also, insert a period after "trees".

    Final thing should read like this...

    The Leo River currently faces deforestation because of illegal logging by a furniture manufacturer. After they realized their wrongdoing, they wanted to help by planting 1500 trees.

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Most Helpful Girl

  • The Leo River is currently facing a deforestation problem due to illegal logging being carried out by a furniture manufacturing company. After realizing their wrong doing they wanted to help by replanting 1500 trees.

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What Guys Said 2

  • You forget a full stop at the end, also realized not realizes.

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  • *realize*

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    • @Josht11 My engrish is good.

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