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should i submit this to my school?rate this poem?


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Most Helpful Guy

  • Yeah our future generation is so smart. If this poem is written by you then I think it good poem. 8/10. You should submit this poem.

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Most Helpful Girl

  • Change "in" to "on" in the 7th line. The poem is unique but could use some improvement. It didn't really have a powerful impact, put more emotion in it.

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What Guys Said 1

  • that's really good!

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What Girls Said 8

  • That is AWSOME! You should certainly submit that. I would like to keep your poem if you don't mind too.

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    • Keep? what do u mean?

    • Not use, just put aside as something interesting to read.

    • ah! okay. i don't mind :)

  • It sounds interesting, you should definitely give it a try 8/10

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  • An 8...

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  • This is great! My only opinion is that I would change "white, like the chair I'm sitting in / in front of a simulation screen" to "white, like the chair I'm sitting on". Just so that you don't have "in" twice in a row.

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    • thanks for the advice

  • This poem is AMAZING

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  • Uhhhh it's plain AWESOME! submit it now!!!

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  • That's deep.

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  • i didn't like it

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