Most Helpful Guy
Yeah our future generation is so smart. If this poem is written by you then I think it good poem. 8/10. You should submit this poem.
Most Helpful Girl
This is great! My only opinion is that I would change "white, like the chair I'm sitting in / in front of a simulation screen" to "white, like the chair I'm sitting on". Just so that you don't have "in" twice in a row.