I edited it multiple times, and I think I did better on this one than my others.
Most Helpful Guy
Nice - Alice in Wonderland meets Utopia - I feel it is the start of something, I would like to see it expanded, the ideas played with, not as the next great novel but a chance for your psyche to process the concepts - You have left it open you could go fluffy, spiritual even dark (it is all fake, a show).
Most Helpful Girl
It's really detailed and interesting. It's impressive! ❤