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Most Helpful Guy
I don't mind narration at all. It's a good literary tool, just don't overuse it.0
Most Helpful Girl
Dialogue and verbs are the best kind of narration In my exp. Pushes the story along fast without being a descriptive essay all the time lol
"Coven walked in and stood at the table across from his peers. Ruddy and handsome. Strands of ink made up his hair with a sapphire stare."
You get the idea of what Coven looks like but its kinda just tellling, not so much showing.
With more dialogue /verbs:
"... a dog attack?"
Bumps blew across Terry's shoulders, alert, aroused; his voice deep in bone but demanding. A pleasant rythm she exhaled in dread,
"Wow... your cousin was only what, 17 years old?"
He let a small smirk leak, rage trembling her lip; Leonard sighed,
"Thats what the police think. Man... Im sorry Terry. Thats hard."
Coven threaded his fingers through her's, his hair painting her shoulder black -
"Hmm.. they don't have a good handle on these murders at all."
Terry swallowed, faking calm against his power. He forced their hands, lifting the newspaper. Charlotte met his blue gaze across the table-
"What makes you think its a murder?"
Coven's hand slid beneath Terry's shirt, but much faster -
"Because I killed her. Not a drop of blood left."
Pistol fragments toppled out of her hoister, crushed like glass,
"Holy shit man!"
He slammed her down, Leonard reached out toward Terry, her face strained as Coven gripped her throat tighter. They pulled hard, three or four blurred students and campus security Charlotte hysterically screamed for-
"Fuck with me again bitch! Ill kill everyone you fucking love!"
The second part dialogue and verbs not only give you an idea of what Coven looks like, but indirectly pushes the scene along quickly whilst also giving rich insight into the characters.
*Terry and Coven have some serious hate between them but sexual tension as well.
*Terry is a part of something secretive, as her peers in the room have no idea why Coven murdered this girl, though Terry knew and was preparing to shoot him for confirming his act.
*Coven is a vampire
*Charlotte has a softer, sensitive personality
*Leonard is protective, comforting towards Terry and may have a romantic interest in her.
All that from 6 lines of dialogue and carefully placed verbs.
Its a bit more interesting to read, but the con of a lot of dialogue is being careful not to sound like a movie script or get reader confused on who "he" or "she" is reference to.1
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