Rate my poem pleasee and correct it if needed?

(p. s. im not finished yet lol)

Death Dream

Colourful high mountains I can see,
Wind brushing through my hair I can feel.
Walking towards the blue glowing sea.
The rising, pink sun was then conceal'd.

The water felt like a lover's hand,
Warm and simply pulchritudinous.
It's unlike the other fairyland,
This was peculiarly numinous.

I thank the universe for this place.
Though it's only when my eyes are closed,
I'm grateful, it's nothing I'd replace.
At times, the timid me was exposed.

It was the crystal meth of my life,
It was the alcohol of my night,
Stupidity was indeed the knife
that stabbed my heart knowing it wasn't right.


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