Does my writing suck?

It’s the nights like these that i realize how much i love you.

With ever breath, with every kick.

Your warmth consumes me, while the fan chills my back.

I feel the pitter patter of your heart in my ear as i breathe in the left over smell of your cologne off your chest.

I realize you are my home, my want; my whole exsistance.

I can fell you absorbing into me with every breath you take, me breathing you in.

If this is what loving you is, i dont want it to end.

-Heaven

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Most Helpful Guy

  • It doesn't suck, but read it aloud and imagine you telling that stuff face to face. If it sounds natural that way, it's well written.

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Most Helpful Girl

  • It’s really good, just pay more attention to spelling mistakes

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  • Your spelling and self editing can use some work. The writing is decent, but I feel like you have more to offer.

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  • Yes. Geeze. Bad spelling, grammar and analogies.

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  • terrible

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  • seems good

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  • Great..

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