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What you listed here isn't really all that bad but a paragraph amount would be way too much here! It's really cool that we can visualize what they are wearing if it's a book but if it's manga or anime where I can see all this happening, I feel the context would be a bit unnecessary! I can just imagine some anime girl, fantasizing about what she wants to wear for her date that would take about a minute or two worth of dialogue to talk about it xD
That was really good, you gave enough detail to paint the picture and you gave context to the decisions.
You also didn't go overboard explaining details of the outfit like exact color shade.
Screw everybody else, stick with that level lol