Do you think my home record song is good, can you share me your opinion?

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Thank you

Answer 1

Xper 6

The music is way louder than the singing. Improve your singing, sounds like you are afarid of someone hearing you.

Pretty much all i can hear are the super basic drums.

gooselover

3 mo
https://youtu.be/Y3Prq13QSsY

Take this as a betrer example to how the voice is louder yet the drums are still very place taking. And melody can still be heard.
Asker

3 mo
What do you think about the lyrics?
gooselover

3 mo
The "to me too" bit has to go away. The lyrics would fit better to a slower song. Or a faster one. This rythm just does not work. The drums never chabge in a song. open.spotify.com/.../6qPJG9s20lWTMVR5uU1ToL in the intro of rhis song you can notice how the drums change from time to time.
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Asker

3 mo
And what about the second part starting at 2:16 ? And thank you for letting me know what you think of it!
gooselover

3 mo
The 2:16 part is too repetitive (guitar). To the second part, add some piano, on the firdt part ditch the whatever that jazz/blues instrument is called. Make some new and better melodies.
Asker

3 mo
Ok, thank you for commenting and I'm gonna ask you one more. I sang when I was drunk, you can hear my voice clear here. What do you think of it? Can you tell me? https://youtu.be/uihj5cO0J-0
gooselover

3 mo
The voice sounds clearer and better than the past examples, this actually sounds decent compared to the others. But dont take me too seriously, im not a voice specialist xd
Asker

3 mo
Okay :D Thank you anyways for commenting and helping <3 happy Christmas
gooselover

3 mo
Merry Christmas
Asker

3 mo
Sorry something went wrong when im writing... Merry Christmas!

Answer 2

gooselover

https://youtu.be/Y3Prq13QSsY

Take this as a betrer example to how the voice is louder yet the drums are still very place taking. And melody can still be heard.

Answer 3

Asker

What do you think about the lyrics?

Answer 4

gooselover

The "to me too" bit has to go away. The lyrics would fit better to a slower song. Or a faster one. This rythm just does not work. The drums never chabge in a song. open.spotify.com/.../6qPJG9s20lWTMVR5uU1ToL in the intro of rhis song you can notice how the drums change from time to time.

Answer 5

Asker

And what about the second part starting at 2:16 ? And thank you for letting me know what you think of it!

Answer 6

gooselover

The 2:16 part is too repetitive (guitar). To the second part, add some piano, on the firdt part ditch the whatever that jazz/blues instrument is called. Make some new and better melodies.

Answer 7

Asker

Ok, thank you for commenting and I'm gonna ask you one more. I sang when I was drunk, you can hear my voice clear here. What do you think of it? Can you tell me? https://youtu.be/uihj5cO0J-0

Answer 8

gooselover

The voice sounds clearer and better than the past examples, this actually sounds decent compared to the others. But dont take me too seriously, im not a voice specialist xd