Girls, can I get some feedback on this poem?

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I wrote a short poem for a shy girl I know and quite like. I haven't told her I like her yet, but am toying over using this poem.

"I know you may think I'm rather pedantic,
But given the chance I can be far more romantic.
If I may be so bold as to show my affection,
Shed some light on my growing attraction.
In my heart you made a decent soft spot,
You really are lovely (but to rhythm I'll say 'hot')."

What do you think girls? Does what I say work? Does it need to be longer? Most importantly, what kind of response do you think I'll get?
Girls, can I get some feedback on this poem?
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