I'd really like yalls input?

One of my goals for this year is to start sharing my poetry again. I used to go to a lot of coffeehouses and things like that years ago to share my poems. And then I had someone tell me that they sucked and that kinda crushed me. I haven't shared a poem in over 5yrs. I figured I'd share with the GaG world. So here it goes...

Unedited

I am trying in vain
To remain somewhat sane
Experiencing loss after loss
Wondering when will I gain..
Will things ever change
Or will they remain
Are you in this for the long haul
Or is this a game
Where everybody points the finger
But no one takes the blame
How strange...
Meanwhile I'm stuck on a highway in the memory lane
But still I maintain
Putting on a show
For all the eyes that are untrained
Until I can break free
And become fully unchained
Fully untamed
Wild and free
The raw unedited version that nobody sees
Cuz at the end of the day that's all I'm trying to be...
Just
Me...

Going to a poetry slam soon, thinking of sharing this. What do y'all think?
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