Is this a good three bullet point answer for why you? job application?

[Anonymous]

. I know you are looking for someone who will give the clientele the best possible service in a passionate, timely manner, and I am that person. I was able to show this regularly as a customer care assistant at McDonald's whilst being a employee of the month.

. I'm very good at working within a group and independently regarding tasks like cleaning tables/floors, answering concerns and providing fast service, and this is the work style in which I excel.

. I believe in the company's values and what they stand for. They match me as a person because I want to do good for people in society, support well being, community, equality/diversity, and ethical working, all of which River Island strives for.

[provokeesmokee]

Those aren't bullet points. They're paragraphs with dots in front.

Get to the point of your paragraphs quickly, in one sentence.

[Asker]

What do I change other than length?