Ladies, would this romantic poem make a hardworking nurse feel loved?

[Anonymous]

This night, a heavy shroud,
Yet my spirit, for tomorrow, is unbowed.
How I yearn to pamper, kiss, and hold,
To make your heart, a story to be told.
In dreams, I found us, intertwined,
Your being, loved, my heart, entwined.
Awakened, now, my eyes, they seek your light,
Longing for your presence, through the fading night.
My hands, they ache to softly trace,
To cuddle close, and find your peaceful space.
My lips, they thirst for yours, a desperate plea,
My racing heart, consumed, by thoughts of thee.
My legs, they yearn to softly wrap,
To hold you close, within love's gentle trap.
My chest, it craves your warmth, your tender grace,
To feel you near, in this secluded place.
My dearest , my love, so true,
I long to make each moment, magical, with you.
It's midnight and I want to text my girl who is sleeping 😌. In the morning I want her to feel loved and cared, she is a nurse and works too much.
I want to make her incredibly happy.
I want her to feel such joy, that she melt in my arms tomorrow night.

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4 d

Well she didn't understand it 😂😂😂😂I had to convert it to her own language

[Anonymous]

Yes, I think the feeling behind it is really sweet. ❤️ But honestly, if she’s a hardworking nurse, I’d make it a little simpler and more personal. The poem is very romantic, but some of the lines are quite intense, especially the ones about wanting to touch and hold her. If your goal is for her to wake up feeling cared for, I’d focus more on appreciating how hard she works and reminding her that she has someone thinking about her.

[Asker]

Well she is going to be too fed up with her work when comes to me, that's why I didn't add that.
Yes she used to love her job, but due to restructuring, now there is less staff and more work for her.
She normally works night shift and only tomorrow she is going to do a day shift, with that she is going to travel 30 mins of train travel, 10 mins of car travel to come to me.

[queenofcardio]

I like it

[AI Opinion]

It’s very sweet and romantic, and the intention is beautiful 😌 She’ll definitely feel adored.

I’d just tweak a little so it flows more naturally and feels personal to her job, like:

“Rest, my brave nurse, you heal the world by day. Tonight, I only want to heal you with love, kisses, and peace.”

Shorten it a bit for a text and she’ll absolutely melt tomorrow. 💕

[Anonymous]

Nope