Does this sound terrible English?

[Vivaldi]

The highest temperature ever recorded in Cizre is 49.1°C (120.4°F), that was on 20 July 2021, which was the highest temperature ever recorded in Turkey until 2 years later.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

I'm not sure if I should pitch in as English is my second language, but it might be a smoother like this:

>> On July 20, 2021, Cizre experienced its highest recorded temperature of 49.1°C (120.4°F). This remained the highest temperature in Turkey until two years later.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

* I'm not sure if I should pitch in as English is my second language, but it might be a [bit] smoother like this [...]

I also have a habit of using a lot of commas but keeping the sentences a bit shorter can make them easier to read.

[Vivaldi]

How about this?

The highest temperature ever recorded in Cizre is 49.1°C (120.4°F) on 20 July 2021, which was the highest temperature ever recorded in Turkey until 2 years later.

[Vivaldi]

Any better?

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

That seems to be an improvement as well except just one little correction in terms of verb tense:

>> The highest temperature ever recorded in Cizre [was] 49.1°C (120.4°F) on 20 July 2021, which was the highest temperature ever recorded in Turkey until 2 years later.

[Vivaldi]

Doesn't "was" make it sound like its record changed later?

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

It did, didn't it? "[...] until two years later." Yet it's mainly just about consistency in verb tense.

[...] *was 49.1°C (120.4°F) [...]
[...] *was the highest temperature ever recorded [...]

These should match.

[Vivaldi]

2 years later, somewhere else broke the country's record.

[Vivaldi]

That's why I used "is" in the first part.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

Yes, so it means the record *was was recorded in the past. It *was 49.1°C at the time it was recorded.

[Vivaldi]

So "was" does not make it sound like its record changed later?

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

It's related to the time it was recorded. Does that make sense? It's not related to the time it was compared 2 years later. Although a simple rule of thumb is just to make sure verb tenses match.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

The "was" actually clarifies that the record changed later, since this is a historic record from the past.

[Vivaldi]

Cizre's record stays the same, Turkey's record changes.

[Vivaldi]

That's why I used "is" for Cizre's record and "was" for Turkey's record.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

I see. If you want to clarify that point, it might be simpler to mention the Turkish city which broke the Cizre record. Varying the verb tenses like this seems at least a bit too grammatically confusing.

[BoopBoopBeep]

"the highest temperature ever recorded" should not appear twice in the same sentence, or in two back-to-back sentences. That's unnecessary in English, as the clause can be inferred by it being the record.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

@BoopBoopBeep Very good point!

[Vivaldi]

@BoopBoopBeep

It was the highest temp in the country until 2021.

Somewhere else broke the country record 2 years later.

[Vivaldi]

Until 2023 I meant

[Vivaldi]

Same place's record stays the same when country's record was taken away from it 2 years later.

[BoopBoopBeep]

yeah that works @Vivaldi

[slatyb]

Meh. Two sentences. The highest temperature ever recorded on Cizre was... on 20 July 2021. That was the...

[Vivaldi]

How about this?

The highest temperature ever recorded in Cizre is 49.1°C (120.4°F) on 20 July 2021, which was the highest temperature ever recorded in Turkey until 2 years later.

[strateguy632]

Not bad but repeated is redundant, simply attach turkey to city. Actually it is false it is not highest if hotter 2 years later but that is not a grammar problem.

'until 2023, The highest temperature, ever recorded in Cizre, turkey, WAS 49.1°C (120.4°F) on on 20 July 2021' but false as above.

[pig_droppings]

It's no wonder Turkey smells like walking into a gym after a long day of intense workouts, and you step in that pungent mixture of sweaty socks and gym equipment that haven't been cleaned for weeks.

[Vivaldi]

What do you mean?

[Vivaldi]

Turkey's climate is diverse.

[NathanDavis]

my English is terrible...