Serious question ladies, see my onlineprofile summary below, good or bad, constructive criticism is welcome, what are your thoughts?

[DaveJord]

I still drive too fast, listen to my music too loud, an drink too much coffee. I have made a few mistakes, and had great success. I don't take myself too seriously, but don't think I don't have my act together, cause I seriously do.

I love outdoor activities, from paddling, biking to hiking. I am not at my all time best , but in excellent health, far from unfit with good longevity genes.

Truth is ladies, my kids are grown, and I am an untethered free spirt. So let's get up and out together.

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[dynamicyandere]

I think everything looks pretty well done!

But, there’s 2 parts that I think could use improvement.

“but don't think I don't have my act together, cause I seriously do.”

I wasn’t even thinking about you not having your act together until you brought this up. This can make people think: Does he have his act together? Why does he feel the need to say this?

So, I think you can leave that part out or change it to something else.

“far from unfit with good longevity genes.”

This part you can do without. You already said you’re in excellent health. That should be enough. And they will also be able to see from your pictures. Then talking about your “longevity genes” is sorta like a scientific feature that you’re trying to sell. I feel like in this sentence you sound like you’re selling a product. Maybe leave this part out or find a way to inject some humor.

But yeah, other than those 2 parts, everything else looks solid to me. 🤙

[Ga-girl]

Couldn't have said it better👍

[SomewhereElse]

Good: It sounds like you enjoy your life and have actual hobbies. I buy into the not taking yourself serious part, the whole profile reads like you have a decent sense of humor and aren't one of those overly sensitive mama's boys who need their ego stroked 24/7.

Bad:

1, driving too fast - this sounds dangerous. Not a good vibe, I wouldn't feel safe getting into a car with you after reading this.

2, no mention of what you actually want from a relationship. Do you want to go hiking / biking / paddling with your partner, or would you rather do those by yourself?

3, music too loud - oww, my poor ears! save the hearing aid for old age.

Hope this helps!

[DaveJord]

Yeah was going for care free... not meant to be taken literally. But yeah, I am not a poky driver... but I'd turn down tge music when not by myself.

I list out my hobbies and other thing on the profile. I guess I am going for vibe, so in general would be so turned off by write up alone you would not respond or like it?

[SomewhereElse]

Ah I see, that makes sense! Hard to tell how much is literal or not when you don't know someone at all though. I wouldn't message first based on this profile, that's for sure, but it's not terrible. If the message was decent I'd probably reply, if it was just some generic "Hi", the main reason would be that I can't tell if you are looking for serious or casual, or anything about what you would be like in a relationship. I'm a sporty person myself, but for me there would need to be something less me-centric in there such as "I make a mean coffee on the trail and would love to share it with my hiking partner". Just anything that lets a woman kind of imagine what kind of guy you are - are you more of a lone wolf or caring gentleman?

[MoniqueTLC]

This is a great bio, now you just need the right pictures to go with the bio. Your first picture should capture a playful smile that's authentic.

Your bio comes across as though someone will have a great date with you because you're fun to be around, but you don't need to over sell yourself, as @dynamicyandere advises.

Overall, pretty good!

[DaveJord]

@moniquetlc your feed back is much appreciated, us guys try so hard, but know so little about women... lol This my third stint with online dating, flipping hate it. But I have had two previous relations, 6 and 8 month long one from on line. But this time around the likes and messages are not coming in as fast, so I like getting feed back from uninvest people. I just moved though into the Mountains, so every one is like 1.5 away and so I think that's the sense I am getting from women on the profile. They all want long term committed relationships, all the one my age seem to have kids still living at home and they want some guy to just magically fit perfect into their lives as conveniently as possible. So that will be my next post maybe, do women really think men like that exist? Do they think when you 're 45 plus single mother some guy they meet on line is going to want to jump into a committed relationship with some one before the first date? When the guys like maybe have to give it time and see how the relationship develops over time, they delete you because they think you're only about sex. Like they are not even willing to put the minimum about of effort into it?

[MoniqueTLC]

Online dating can be tricky. At the moment, I think the ratio on online dating sites is 9:1, with men being in the majority, making women have so many more options. On top of that, if your location is farther away, women might be more inclined to steer towards the guys that in closer proximity. AND then you have the site algorithms that can affect the success of a profile. And then let's not forget how all they have to judge someone on is their pictures and a good bio.

I hear you. I don't have much experience on that unfortunately, but what I can say is you need to 100% screen the women you go on dates with, and not unintentionally get into one of those situations. Women at that age with kids still living at home, i think are subconsciously looking for that man to 'save them' even though they won't admit it, and hide behind a good career, home, etc.

[DaveJord]

100% agree.

[Msputiton]

I never did online dating so I'm not sure what people look for.

But off my opinion on what you got.

I say it's good.

You come off as down to earth, admit you got flaws in a very fun and lighthearted way. But also let us know your flaws and mistakes don't define you.

But also let us know your hobbies and some positives without sounding egotistical.

Pretty good.

[DaveJord]

Thank you that is exactly what I was going for.

[Msputiton]

If it's too personal let me know.
How old are your kids?

[DaveJord]

17 and 25 and they do not live with me.

[Msputiton]

Both oh ok, boys? Girls? One of each

[DaveJord]

Girls

[Msputiton]

Yeah you seem like you be one of them real laid back open dads that would talk to your kids bout anything.

[DaveJord]

Yeah, I did, and yes I am. But its really hard if you married the wrong type of women.

[Msputiton]

Bet.