Do you like these 2 poems?

[marish01]

Here are poems of 2 girls. They are umfortunately not famous. See how talented they are. Compare them to famous songwriters.

1st one

I wish to delve into the depths of your mind,
Where mischief lurks and secrets unwind.
What drove you to inflict such pain on me?
In the shadows of your thoughts, what did you see?

Did my cries cause you restless nights,
Constant reminders of unfair fights?
Or did you plot your next twisted game,
Crafting cruelty with no sense of shame?

What whispered temptation lured you in?
What demon helped you embrace the sin?
Did you ever feel remorse for the wounds you caused,
Do you ever acknowledge the life you paused?

Was it a need for power, a craving for control,
Which stole my innocence and scarred my soul?
Or was it the thrill of danger, a twisted thrill,
Which urged you to go against my will?

Questions unanswered, mysteries concealed,
Lives mistreated, forever unhealed.
With every denial, responsibility defied,
Leaving shattered lives in your deceitful stride.

2nd one

I don't get how you can't see
All the things you did to me.
If only you knew
All the pain you put me through.

I am not going to stick around,
Waiting for your heart to be found.
I am going to get away,
Find a better place to stay.

You're blind to the things you do.
All my torment is because of you.
I want to stay, but I won't,
I should hate you, but I don't.

So I'm going to get away from here,
But my heart will stay near,
Even though I will always love you,
I can't stand the things you do.

[SueShe]

I believe that I actually hear heard (or read perhaps) the first poem which is actually a sad one.

Does it not handle about a person that has been abused by someone that was close to the victim? The words are strong but if you put them in the context of what the victim must have felt, then you realize that those words have such power to make one think and take a step back to realize that it could have happened to anyone of us, to anyone that has ever been abused in a way or another.

The second poem is unknown to me but is equally as powerful. I see it more as a poem for a person whose love has been denied or not reciprocated.

The first one definitely leaves a much deeper impression on me.

Nice choice of poems that should make anyone think that abuse and non reciprocated love are very closely linked.

[marish01]

I read many poems. They were so well written. But I chose these 2.
Although I've never experienced any type of abuse I still feel the depth of their pains.
It hurts to know these talented victims can't get the popularity they deserve.

[SueShe]

There are many victims in the same situation that don't even have the force anymore to express the depth of their sorrow, the unending emotional pain to have suffered to be abused by someone they thought they could trust.

[marish01]

Yes not everyone can express their feelings but their pains are still inside them

[IceCreamSandwich]

They aren't the best poets, but the message is clear and strong.

[marish01]

Show the best poets

[IceCreamSandwich]

What?

[marish01]

Poems* 😆

[IceCreamSandwich]

What are you asking?

[marish01]

Show me the best poems

[IceCreamSandwich]

I don't know what the best poems are. I just meant as far as poems go, these seem like early ones, before fully mastering your writing style and genre. They aren't bad at all, and sometimes rougher pieces are even more impactful than polished ones. I didn't mean it as an insult.
If you want to know what my favorite poem is, it's "Caged Bird" by Maya Angelou. It's not about the same topic as these, but I think it also has a very strong message.

[marish01]

Thanks for sharing.
I did understand you.
I wasn't refering to the topic but the weiting style.

[marish01]

Writing

[IceCreamSandwich]

Okay. Thank you.

[loveslongnails]

I'm not moved or impressed by either of them

[marish01]

Can you show some good poems?

[chrissykerdock]

the imagery isn't there

[marish01]

What do you mean?

[chrissykerdock]

im reading someone pissed but no art no pictures in my mind

[marish01]

They are assault victims

[ChicoFromThe305]

The talent is there but the topic sounds messed up

[eagle1951]

cool

[SueShe]

It is not cool. It is sad.

[elaphe]

@SueShe I think he meant the poems were good when he said "cool".

[eagle1951]

@SueShe being a published poet i think they are very good even through Sad

[SueShe]

I do find them excellent. They are very sad but I do find them something to think about. I have been thinking of them now for the last 10 minutes and the more I read it, the more I feel like hugging anyone that had to endure what that person had to when she wrote that poem.

[marish01]

@SueShe these poems are so well written. The rhymes, the choice of words. No poet ever wrote such professionally

Besides they perfectly describe their pain.