Not sure what else I can do to improve this cover letter or what's missing?

[Anonymous]

The two bits of info that are covered are my number & email.

[DreamCrescent]

Good luck, girly

maybe add under the second line why you had your eye on this pharmacy in particular and what a job there would mean for your 5-year plan

but it’s a well-written CL 💛

[DreamCrescent]

oh shoot. i didn’t mean girly

sorry, man. i went straight into female empowerment mode

[Asker]

They've rejected me this morning.

[DreamCrescent]

well, it’s not bcz of your CL. it’s a standard well-written letter

but i will say, talk about your 5-year plan and get personal. if your letter gets too long, you don’t have to describe the duties at mcdonalds or some of your past responsibilities

i wish you all the best :)

[Anonymous]

Maybe add a subject after Dear Hiring Manager?

[Asker]

Do you have e. g?