Does this sci-fi scene show a character completely out of their depth?

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

Been tryin' some writin' prompts, innit?

>> Prompt: Write a conversation between two characters where one is completely out of their depth.

Captain Janebar fragrantly stormed into the engineering bay against the blaring alarms. "Status."

The tiny engineer attempted to initiate a spin of his swivel chair, but applied too much force. The momentum caused the chair to quickly rotate 360 degrees, become off balance, and fall sideways while spilling his supple body and banana barrette V. I. S. O. R. on the floor.

Janebar approached and stood over him, looking down. "Report."

Looking up towards her general direction with his unseeing eyes, he said, "The tingleton warped its barnacle. It's likely the voltage of the plasma tract. If we adjust the resonator, the turbines might twankle their tarpanators just enough to..."

"Use plain English," the captain reminded him.

"Ship's broke."

"Oh." Janebar stepped over his body and looked at the computer screen. She especially loved the color choice of the pastel blue for the ship's rotating wireframe against the dark grey background. Nonetheless, she found the bright red text below rather harsh. Perhaps pink would have been a better design choice, she thought, and that would nicely match her outfit.

[Sevenpointfive]

i don't think entirely. they haven't been tasked to do anything scientific yet. it shows two quirky people. there's not enough there to judge them. sometimes you put stuff in like, the colonel says he keeps fixing this for him every week and it hasn't worked in a year! maybe he'll get some grease later and do it himself.

or, the pink visceral colors snaps her out of thoughts with only one left lingering. she sure is hungry for sashimi.

stupid crap that outlines the person not the situation. the situation is only a sentence or two.

"are you here to microwave the radiator tubes corporal?"

"sir, i'm going to do my job."

"you wouldn't happen to know anything about chairs, would you"?

"yeah, uh, i'll have to get back to you after i order the parts".

i love creative writing. i love making dialogue. so if you ever need inspiration then i'm your guy if you like my style.

[AngryCarl3]

Writing prompts is not writing. Stop with the prompts and start using your brain.

[NoDecision]

You should try receiving some constructive criticism with grace. 😯🙄

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

@NoDecision I don't see a constructive solution. So I should not start with writing prompts as a beginner and start writing short stories, novellas, novels? I am open if that is the suggestion. What does "writing with my brain" mean, anyway? I am a CompSci R&D type responsible for radical changes in our TV & Movie Industry. What am I failing to use in my brain? I have many critiques for writers. I don't think their IQ is all that high, maybe 120 at best.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

My coaches as a beginners told me to write responses to these prompts. This grudge is against my teachers. I am a beginner.

[NoDecision]

By the way, Captain Janebar is a take-off of Captain Janeway, right?

[WhitneySnow]

It shows a character who is completely clueless. Not quite the same as out of her depth, but close enough.

[NoDecision]

Shows that the writer was. He should get another job.

[NoDecision]

Be nice. You did ask for opinions. You also didn't say you wrote it.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

This AI framing of our Qs is ruining our potential friendship. And also this other guy irritating me for whom I will ask forgiveness for lashing out at you. I think he's a bot. He's just saying mean things about every post I make 2 seconds after I make them.

[GuyAnswersGirls123]

My bad. I'm getting impatient with the other guy. I didn't mean to take it out on you. Also I wrote it. I'm from Japan. I'm just trying Creative Writing prompts for the first time. And also the AI changed the question I was posing to something more annoying. Mine originally was like, "I'm a dumbass new to writing. How's this?"

[Mamasssaaan]

@NoDecision Better than being an old cranky hag with a failing bakery

[NoDecision]

@Mamasssaaan The Troll is back. 🙄