I write too, so what do you think about this poem?

[omnivert]

I wrote lots of poems till now and there is a long way to go.
But can you share your opinion about my this poem?
How does it sounds to you?

[Gaibriel]

Eh I don't like it.

It's confusing.

Also you can't walk on corridors.

You walk through corridors.

Rhyme is great but you need to be more descriptive.

[glossydripdrip]

Doesn’t make much sense to me.